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         Dally's P.O.V
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     Waking up I saw the sky was filled with pinks and reds. Sunset. I slept almost the whole day away. Great. I stretched and yawned. Doing this I discovered I wasnt berried anymore. That explains why Im sun burnt. Dumb ass forgot to pack it. That dumb ass is me. Yeah. I'll take the blame. I sat up and looked around. Still nobody here. And theres no splashing or laughing.... Where are the girls? Im starting to panic now.

  "Chill out Dal. Cynthia is over there.". Johnny pointed to a big sand castle. I didnt think he would even be awake.

     I looked over at him and smiled. Jade was curled up to him and was asleep. He just had a sleepy little grin on his face. I ruffled his hair and got up. Walking over to the sand castle I heard little mumbles. I knew it was Cyn. I smirked and got ready to pounce. I waited a few seconds then leaped over the castle with a loud scream. When I landed my hair was in my face. I heard a yelp.

  "Hah! Thats what you get for putting me through that!". I was laughing my head off.

  "M-MOMMY!!". That wasnt Cynthia...It was a little kid...Shit...He punched me in the jaw and ran off crying. His mom grabbed him and gave me a dirty look. I knew I was blushing.

     Back over at the towels I heard laughter. I looked over and Johnny and Cynthia are cracking up. They planned this! Johnny went along with it! Boy. Is he gonna get it when we get home. They were laughing loudly and holding their stomachs. They better cool off on the laughing. They dont wanna wake Jade up.

  "Would you guys shut up?!". Jade growled at them. Heh. Spoke too soon.

     They shut up real fast. She was givin both of them a death glare. They gave her a smile and ruffled her hair. She smiled big. Jade always did love that. I saw this as an opening to an attack. While Cynthia was distracted with Jade. I snuck around behind her and quickly lifted her into my arms.

  "A-Ack! Dally! Put me down!". Her screech was funny so I chuckled at her.

  "Naw. Just let me hold ya for a bit. I aint gonna hurt ya.". Of course that was a lie and she knew it. She struggled and squirmed in my arms.

     To calm her down I waited a bit and got my lips on hers. I gently licked her top lip and sucked on her bottom one. She stopped moving and closed her eyes relaxing. Her lips were really soft. She kissed back and let out a soft moan. Little did she know I was already knee deep in freezing cold water. The kiss was nice. I mean. We full on making out. Tongue and all. Too bad it has to end. I smirked in the kiss and dropped her. She let out a loud yelp and was under water. I laughed and didnt notice her pop back up.

  "Dallas Winston!!". She yelled at me and smacked my chest. Which didnt hurt at all.

  "What? It's payback. Paybacks a bitch huh.". I winked at her and smiled.

  She smiled back and nodded. "Yeah. I guess we're even. And it sure is. Just like you're my bitch.".

  I raised an eyebrow at her. "Uh. Im not you're bitch. You're mine.".

  "No. You're mine.".

  "No, mine.".

  "Mine!".

  "Mine!".

  "You all are MY bitches! Now get your bitch asses over here so we can go home, and yall can make me money!". Jade yelled at us.

     We all laughed and headed to the truck with our stuff. It was a real fun day! I mean, getting berried and tortured, kissing Cyn at the beach, getting revenge on her, and discovering that Jade is our pimp and all of us are her bitches. Heh. I guess all is fair in Love and Revenge.

     The End
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FINALLY I GOT IT DONE!!!!!!!!!! Im so happy! :iconhappytearsplz: This is an art trade for :iconparamorewolfpack: ^^ I REALLY hope she likes it. Sorry its so short.. Its all I could effing think of -_- Tell me what you think! Oh. Its a sequal to This: [link]

Cynthia - :iconparamorewolfpack:

Jade - :iconsonic4465:

Johnny, Dally - S.E Hinton
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Errr, the ending is my only problem with this. I mean, no 10 year old girl calls her elders "her bitches." When I was ten, if I did that to my older cousins, they would slap me across the jaw and I'd get soap in my mouth. It was kinda a turn off from the whole story and well yeah. Otherwise, it was fine.

Oh have you taken this quiz for your OC, Jade? I have for mine, it was pretty fun: [link]
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~sonic4465 Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist
O-Oh...Sorry..

No I havent.
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Just for next time, don't make Jade act older than she is, alright? That's really it though, so it's fine ^^

Oooo you should! It helped me a lot XD
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~sonic4465 Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist
Heh.. Well. Reason I did.. What helped me with the end was some memories from my friends. When we were younger we would cuss all the time and we thought it was THE COOLEST THING. Im glad you like it ^^ You kinda scared me there.

XD Sounds good!
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Well, it kinda made me feel kinda uncomfortable with the ending. It could have definitely ended in a more sweeter and cleaner way. I'm not a big fan of little kids cursing so that's why I got all mad. And Cynthia or Dally wouldn't be laughing about that. Cynthia would take that to heart and just start ranting about how she doesn't like the term bitch and Dally would be kinda pissed off cause he doesn't take that from no one.

Yeah, it helped me make my OCs not Mary Sueish haha. Try it with Jade and tell me what you get! ^^
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~sonic4465 Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist
....I can change it you know.. All you gotta do is ask.

Kk
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Nahhh, s'okay don't worry about it

Awesome!
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~sonic4465 Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist
N-No. If its gonna bug ya I wanna change it.

Yesh! *epic pose*
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